My thoughts are in blue, words to delete are in red, suggested rephrasing is in orange.

I am seeking representation for THE HALL OF RAMS, a standalone Adult Historical Fantasy novel set in early 9th-century Norway, completed at approximately 110,000 words with series potential. Typically I tell people to start with their hook, but this is well done and is doing some good work, so I say leave it!

Now that summer’s over, Jarl of Konungsholm, an orphan and impoverished viking, only wants to feast, warm his bed with a woman’s company, and ignore his frequent dreams of distant lands. Okay, but what does summer have to do with it?

But, when formerly-allied allied with him, or with each other, formerly? Might be better to find a simpler phrasing raiders, led by Earl Orn and bolstered by a mysterious berserker, attack his home and capture most of its survivorshome as in his individual residence? Or as in his village / fief? , Jarl’s winter hopes melt like spring’s first thaw.

He expects his new master, Orn’s mysterious berserker, to be a sadist. Instead, his captor treats him with unexpected obligeance, I actually don't know this word and had to look it up patience, and (unlike Konungsholm) not sure who this is / would be? His former master? needs clarified keeps him fed. Another peculiarity strikes him—his captor, Ennilang, I'd put his name in the first sentence where you identify him as the berserker, as I was reading this as a new character claims to be the God Thor. Feels like slightly more than a peculiarity Despite the insanity of it, Jarl finds himself falling in love with the berserker. Romantically in love? Earlier he wanted a woman in his bed over the winter so maybe clarify

Plagued by dreams foretelling his death, his budding attraction to Ennilang, the pursuit of his people’s freedom, and Orn’s intent to bury him, Jarl learns that politics makes for (literal) strange bedfellows. Okay I think the attraction is clarified here, but why would Orn want to bury him? Is he fighting toward freeing his people?

Trapped in snowy Eikstad, I don't know what this is / means Jarl will uncover the truth of his lineage, unearth the source of his dreams, discover a very “queer” love, and, as his village’s last man, earn an Earldom, if he’s able to survive the winter … Definitely need more plot here. The truth of his lineage just now gets mentioned in the last para. More words are given to the romance than the plot - what does Jarl want? What stands in the way of him getting it? How will he overcome the obstacls?

I am a long-time lover of myth, having studied Classics, Classical Reception, and same-gender relationships in antiquity at the graduate level, and have since expanded to a second pantheon. My poetry has appeared in “Thel Literary and Art Magazine” and the academic Journal “Animus.” Great bio!