My thoughts are in blue, words to delete are in red, suggested rephrasing is in orange.

After ten years spent banished to Counterpane Island, Drizzle knows humans have poor judgment for three reasons:

1. They keep calling her an ogre. Just because Drizzle is six feet tall (average height for a twelve-year old Morathian btw), has bright red skin, a crown of horns and she’s fireproof, does not make her an ogre.

2. Humans think Counterpane, with its white sand beaches and turquoise seas, is a “vacation paradise.” Uh - no. Drizzle much prefers her home country of Morath, with its sulfurous breezes, abundant lava flows and toasty temperatures.

3. Only humans would allow a hybrid dragon-queen to rule their island. Czarina is always getting mad and popping into dragon form. One time she leveled a whole city block because there were peas in her salad. Any species that puts up with such stupidity has a fundamental weakness.

   Interesting way to begin. It goes against the grain, but it does capture voice and setting. What I think we're missing is how humans figure into this world. Also, if she's not an ogre, what is she?

Drizzle would give anything to return home. But her mother’s failed attempt at challenging their leader the leader at home? means Drizzle was banished and bound to Czarina with a binding spell. The curse can be broken only when Drizzle successfully beats the leader’s daughter at a dance fight. The leader's daughter... not Czarina? It's getting a little confusing and you might be better off naming the leader's daugther.

Which is a problem because Drizzle doesn’t know how to dance fight. The sacred art is only taught on Morath.

ThenWhen Czarina decides Drizzle needs leadership training. She sends Drizzle she is sent to summer camp on Corpulent Island. There for the first time, Drizzle finds friends (the fact they’re not human probably helps) and tackles camp challenges like one of the gang.

Oh, and also? She encounters another Morathian, who happens to be a retired dance fighting coach. Suddenly, Drizzle’s dreams seem to be in reach...until a historic enemy of Morath slithers in to mess everything up. More detail here. What does this mean? What is the enemy and how do they mess everything up and why would they do it in the first place? A query isn't the place to tease, so make sure you're dishing out the whole plate.

Drizzle battles enemies old and new while she tries to break the curse. But the more progress she makes, the more her own assumptions - of humans, of Morathian culture, of what it means to be her - are threatened in THE MONSTER CURSE, a 62,000-word middle grade humorous fantasy. It could be described as Shrek meets The Last Dragonslayer.

The voice is here and I think the non-traditional approach is worth a try. But make sure you get your plot on the page.