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The harsh Nordic land of Skoro doesn’t care about a former slave like Thaya. I think you need a better hook in terms of getting confrontation front and center. A "land" not caring about someone doesn't feel personal, or emotional. Is there a specific person she needs to impress? Ruling power? No matter. Thaya risks everything to become a warrior, selling all her belongings and embarking on a hunt for an honor kill to prove her worth. Prove to who? But her gambit fails when Eldritch horrors infect her, we don't know what this means, or what the consequences are. Is this like zombie rules? What happens to someone who is infected? and Thaya is forced to cut off her hand to escape. From a person? Or a curse? Or what? Crippled and poisoned by a dark entity she doesn’t understand, sorry, but we don't either. I don't know if you mean she's actually crippled, likewise with poisoned. Is there a ticking clock at work here? What's the fallout of the Eldritch thing? Thaya must find new allies to survive, I thought she didn't have any allies at all? And survive... what exactly? Just the rest of her life? Or Eldritch stuff? so she turns to a secret organization called the Conclave of Nine.
The Conclave offers Thaya a chance to become a warrior in their battle against a demonic cult bent on initiating Ragnarök and the destruction of their home. The way this is written it sounds like the Conclave is bent on the destruction of their own home, which I can't imagine is accurate Worse, the cult leader seems to take takes a sadistic interest in Thaya, accelerating the eldritch horror’s infection within her and twisting her memories. Why would her memories matter? Twisting them how? Thaya must stop the cult and find a cure for her eldritch curse before the corruption devours her humanity. So now she wants to stop the cult that was initially her new allies?
For a dark and ancient power awakens, beckoned by its cultists at the end of times. The twilight of the gods approaches, and Thaya will need to find a warrior’s valor in the dark word echo with "dark" days ahead.
VALOR’S LAST BREATH: THE DARKHEART SAGA is a multiple point-of-view 127,000 word fantasy novel inspired by the Viking ages and cosmic horror. This saga mixes Joe Abercrombie’s bloody, grim-dark action and John Gwynne’s historical realism with a diverse cast, adding dashes of Cthulhu terror, fantastical beasts, and witty banter.
Your word count might be a little high. Fantasy gets some wiggle room, but as a debut trying to get attention it might be necessary to get it under 100k. Also - I see no indication whatsoever in this query that it would be a multi POV story. The only person I'm aware of as a named individual is Thaya. Also, I don't have much feel for her as a character. She's a warrior - got it - but, what else? Is she broody, or is she always ready with a good one-liner? Otherwise, this para is great!
I am a current psychology professor and trained psychologist with a PhD in Counseling Psychology, which helps me accurately and sensitively portray the mental health struggles of my characters. That is super cool, but mental health doesn't seem to play into the plot much, based on this query. I'm guessing it's tied to the Eldritch element, but as you can see from my notes above, that's my big hangup - I don't know what it is, so I don't know what's at stake.